Post by Internal Nova on Feb 17, 2014 20:42:00 GMT -5
Hey guys, this is a short story I made. Tell me what you think, any kind of critisism is welcomed! Thanks for reading! P.S. I know about my spelling errors and that the ending is a bit confusing. By you, I meant the bullies. Not Ash. (P.P.S. Shadow said it was okay to use her name Ash)
Remember; Someone Loves You
By: Sabra (aka Internal Nova)
There she is the most amazing girl you have ever seen. Her beautifully sloping jaw is accompanied but her succulent, full, light pink lips. Her sparkling ice blue eyes send chills down your spine every time you look upon her hourglass figure of a body. Her long eyelashes cascade long shadows upon her prominent cheekbones that are always a light pink. Her hair is dirty blonde, but when the sun hits it just right, it looks like an angelic halo is placed upon her head. Her skin is a light ivory white skin tone. Her height of 5’2 makes her even cuter. This magnificent girl who looks like she is birthed by angels is named, Erin. With every step she takes, there’s a hop and her hair flows behind her like a stream of silk. Finally, and probably the cutest thing about her, is that light brown freckles are dotted under her eyes. You want to walk up, but you seem frozen in time by her beauty. Every time she looks over at you, and flashes that pure white smile your heart thuds inside your chest and butterflies flutter about in your stomach, and you lose all sense of speech. She is perfect in yours eyes, beautiful inside in out. But there are things you don’t know.
You don’t know about the scars that line her arms and her thighs. You don’t know about the people who bully her. You don’t know about her abusive parents. You didn’t know that her beautiful smiles and flawless laughs were fake and just a trick to hide back her real, agonizing pain. Finally, you don’t know that she is suicidal and needs one more person to push her before she is pushed too far, or just one person to show her love, compassion, or just a smile. She walks inside school, ducking her face, fear glinting in her eyes. You don’t realize that and you walk in behind her. You planned on telling her that you liked her, that you had love at first sight with her after school. Glancing over her shoulder she catches your eyes. Instead of smiling you stare blankly at her and it looks as is her eyes became crystallized and glassed over. She runs off before her tears can spill infront of you. Sighing you go to your locker, your mind on her all day. When the day ends, you’re held back by a teacher and you miss your chance. Heavily sighing you walk home, heaving out another depressed sigh.
Once home you do your homework and game for awhile you turn the channel to the news. You’re about to flick the channel to something different when a video catches your attention. Your breath catches in your throat, you because dizzy, and tears spill onto your cheeks. There she is your angel, confessing everything. Her last sentence catches your ears. "Ash… I love you. Please know. This isn’t your fault." She loved you, and all she needed to know, was your feelings for her. Now your beautiful baby girl is hanging from a noose. The remote drops from your hand as your frozen. You see policemen break down the door and handcuff an intoxicated girl, her mom, and a high guy, her father. Loading your precious lady onto a stretcher, her hands folded neatly on her chest. You stumble to your bathroom, and that’s when you let all of your tears out. The tears crash to the ground like angels are crying because one of their children will be sadly joining them. Stumbling numbly to your bedroom, you pass out on your bed in a mass ocean of tears.
The next day you decide to skip school, not caring about anything anymore. When you do go back to school, they announce her death, and the individuals who bullied her are arrested for assisted suicide and harassment. When it comes time to her funeral you, and what appears to be the rest of your town come, hundreds or people. You ended up crying the most. Putting roses on her deceased body you force yourself to walk away, not being able to take notice of this any longer.
School becomes another problem of yours, the one thing you used to love, now haunts and reaps your soul. Every corner you turn reminds you of her. Her best friend tried to commit suicide but didn’t succeed like she had. The bullies are held in juvey and are stunned, not knowing that they had pushed you that far. The teachers that had her quit their jobs, thinking that they pushed her too far. Her others friends cut now, and so do you. One smile! One damn smile could have saved a life! A smile! Her siblings, a six-year-old sister and a four-year-old brother don’t understand what happened and are now in foster care where her parents are in prison. She was fourteen and she ended her life with so much potential, now all that potential is gone. I hope you’re happy in what you succeeded in doing here. I hope you feel accomplished. Because now she’s gone, and someone loved her, and still does. Congratulations, you win.
Remember; Someone Loves You
By: Sabra (aka Internal Nova)
There she is the most amazing girl you have ever seen. Her beautifully sloping jaw is accompanied but her succulent, full, light pink lips. Her sparkling ice blue eyes send chills down your spine every time you look upon her hourglass figure of a body. Her long eyelashes cascade long shadows upon her prominent cheekbones that are always a light pink. Her hair is dirty blonde, but when the sun hits it just right, it looks like an angelic halo is placed upon her head. Her skin is a light ivory white skin tone. Her height of 5’2 makes her even cuter. This magnificent girl who looks like she is birthed by angels is named, Erin. With every step she takes, there’s a hop and her hair flows behind her like a stream of silk. Finally, and probably the cutest thing about her, is that light brown freckles are dotted under her eyes. You want to walk up, but you seem frozen in time by her beauty. Every time she looks over at you, and flashes that pure white smile your heart thuds inside your chest and butterflies flutter about in your stomach, and you lose all sense of speech. She is perfect in yours eyes, beautiful inside in out. But there are things you don’t know.
You don’t know about the scars that line her arms and her thighs. You don’t know about the people who bully her. You don’t know about her abusive parents. You didn’t know that her beautiful smiles and flawless laughs were fake and just a trick to hide back her real, agonizing pain. Finally, you don’t know that she is suicidal and needs one more person to push her before she is pushed too far, or just one person to show her love, compassion, or just a smile. She walks inside school, ducking her face, fear glinting in her eyes. You don’t realize that and you walk in behind her. You planned on telling her that you liked her, that you had love at first sight with her after school. Glancing over her shoulder she catches your eyes. Instead of smiling you stare blankly at her and it looks as is her eyes became crystallized and glassed over. She runs off before her tears can spill infront of you. Sighing you go to your locker, your mind on her all day. When the day ends, you’re held back by a teacher and you miss your chance. Heavily sighing you walk home, heaving out another depressed sigh.
Once home you do your homework and game for awhile you turn the channel to the news. You’re about to flick the channel to something different when a video catches your attention. Your breath catches in your throat, you because dizzy, and tears spill onto your cheeks. There she is your angel, confessing everything. Her last sentence catches your ears. "Ash… I love you. Please know. This isn’t your fault." She loved you, and all she needed to know, was your feelings for her. Now your beautiful baby girl is hanging from a noose. The remote drops from your hand as your frozen. You see policemen break down the door and handcuff an intoxicated girl, her mom, and a high guy, her father. Loading your precious lady onto a stretcher, her hands folded neatly on her chest. You stumble to your bathroom, and that’s when you let all of your tears out. The tears crash to the ground like angels are crying because one of their children will be sadly joining them. Stumbling numbly to your bedroom, you pass out on your bed in a mass ocean of tears.
The next day you decide to skip school, not caring about anything anymore. When you do go back to school, they announce her death, and the individuals who bullied her are arrested for assisted suicide and harassment. When it comes time to her funeral you, and what appears to be the rest of your town come, hundreds or people. You ended up crying the most. Putting roses on her deceased body you force yourself to walk away, not being able to take notice of this any longer.
School becomes another problem of yours, the one thing you used to love, now haunts and reaps your soul. Every corner you turn reminds you of her. Her best friend tried to commit suicide but didn’t succeed like she had. The bullies are held in juvey and are stunned, not knowing that they had pushed you that far. The teachers that had her quit their jobs, thinking that they pushed her too far. Her others friends cut now, and so do you. One smile! One damn smile could have saved a life! A smile! Her siblings, a six-year-old sister and a four-year-old brother don’t understand what happened and are now in foster care where her parents are in prison. She was fourteen and she ended her life with so much potential, now all that potential is gone. I hope you’re happy in what you succeeded in doing here. I hope you feel accomplished. Because now she’s gone, and someone loved her, and still does. Congratulations, you win.